Hello Apple inc. , my name is Emil Kowalski and I would like to introduce to you an all new style and line of gaming and luxury computers I have worked on. My gaming series vary from lan party editions to extreme editions for the real gamers. I am a gamer myself and if I got this computer I would surely be very happy with my purchase. The base or main style of the luxury computers is for business people on the move. All computers can be enabled to put your own style on them to give them that special touch.
Gaming is a big part of my product line and I think I concentrated on it the most of all parts. My gaming computers are souped up with the latest processors and most powerful motherboard and video card. As you can see all this will add up to around 89 fps which is strong enough to power the city that never sleeps, New York also the place of your headquarters. The customizations are limitless on the gaming series. You can pick what kind and color case you want, what color neon lights, and of course what theme you want or can create one of your own. There can be special orders arranged for more affordable series that me and my team will work on with pleasure.
I believe giving a customer what they want is the main key to having a great and well known business. I pretty sure you guys already know that because Apple inc. is in marketplace and mall I go to. Also being polite and helping the customers is also important especially when selling gaming computers which may cost a bit causing people to put strain on themselves for buying such a pricey object. I have learned that objects that are sold for what their exactly sell the best. That’s why I plan on having affordable prices that will attract customers rather than scare them. The way the money will be split is 50% to me and 50% to you.
My gaming series may be a bit close to your Macbook air but I can assure you it will be a great replacement. My luxury edition is for business people on the go looking for a good computer to save files and write and make presentations on. The luxury edition has multiple features that will leave those other business computers in the dust. It has 2010 Microsoft office professional on it which will enables you to write reports in a breeze and create presentations with a snap of your fingers. The computer itself weighs 5 pounds counting the super sensitive back lit platinum keyboard that allows you to type freakishly fast. It has a 14 inch screen that makes it very portable. A test shows that it can fit in most purses making papers look fat. It has a 10000 whv battery that will support up to 36 hours of hard work. Taking it on planes is a breeze allowing you to do your work while you sore thru the skies.
I am positive that my computers will be a positive change for your company because I checked and your company has no record of having gaming computers. Your company is amazing now and if you add my line of computers it will be perfect. I calculated and your sale rate will go up by 30% if there is a gaming computer in your line because at least all of your customers are gamers seeking for that perfect setup to help them beat those noobs online. I was one of those gamers buying from your company and waiting until you bring out those big guns but I figured you won’t so I am now helping those people’s dreams come true. I hope you read this over to let your company go on for the better.
I liked the lenghth of your piece. You described the computer. You said what is inside, it what colors you can get for the outside, and what neon lights you want. You said how long you could work, what kind of Microsoft Word it has, and that the keyboard lets you type freakishly fast. If I was the boardroom I would show your commercial.
ReplyDeletei agree with moiz about how he liked the length of your piece. I liked how yoou provided so many facts about the product and so many reasons for them to excepy your commercial. Your piece was excellent and i think they should except yours because it has so many reasons and supporting details of why they should except it. You supported everything in your essay with reasons and supporting details. GREAT JOBB EMIL!!
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